This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner's comment: Although the answer considers the main (issues) in the question, it deals much more with the aspect of 'competition' than it does with 'co-operation'. Some of the supporting examples are overdeveloped and (divert) the reader away from the argument. However, the main points are relevant and the writer's point of view is generally clear. The argument has a logical (progression) and there is some good use of linking expressions, though the use of rhetorical questions to signal topic changes is not very skilful. There are also examples of overusing markers, and of errors in (referencing). The candidate tries to use a range of language, but there are regular errors in word choice and word form, and this (occasionally) causes problems for the reader. Similarly, a range of structures is (attempted), but not always with good control of punctuation or grammar. However, the meaning is generally clear.