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Spending Time with Grandparents

When I was two years old , my parents began to start to work in ZheJiang province . In order to make my childhood better my parents decided not to take me with them , so I spent my 4 years with my grandparents .
  It was really hard for me to remember the days I spent with my parents from 2 to 6 .But I still remember the last time when I back to my hometown and celebrate the 70th birthday of my grandmother .
  It was May the first of 2010 , after 3 hours flying , I finally arrived in Harbin . When I arrived my grandmother's house , it was in the midnight and we just have some freetalking . Next day I woke up pretty early and helped my grandmother buying some foods and because of the appearance of me , my grandmother cooked many delicious food like celebrating my birthday .
  Next day more and more people come to my house to celebrate my grandmother's birthday , so I have to stay in the hotel and write my homework .
  Now I'm so busy preparing the college entrance exams that I have no time to spend with my grandmother but as soon as I finished the exams I'll fly back to my hometown to stay with my grandmother for a long time .

 

Hi, Lee. Your grandmother seems sweet and she's also lucky to have you. However, do not start a sentence with a coordinating conjunction like “but” to avoid any sentence fragments, which are considered incomplete. There should be no space between a word and the punctuation mark for it. Nonetheless, you did a very good job.